What an angry rabbit teaches about ‘show-don’t-tell’…#writetip

Author Selenia Illyria shared this Tumbler post on Instagram:

When I saw this, I laughed so hard I cried, and I “regranned” it.

Then I analyzed why it was so funny. The individual who originally posted this informs us her cat caught the rabbit, and the rabbit appears to be angry.

That’s worth a smile. However, someone else wrote a caption to the photo from the rabbit’s point of view, providing internal dialogue. Match that with the rabbit’s scowl, and it’s funnier than hell. We know the rabbit is pissed–without the caption writer ever once saying “the rabbit is angry.” The rabbit’s choice of words shows it.

The showing, not the telling, is what made it funny.

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I am Torg. I have waited 34 rotations for a mate of my own. With this shipment, I was sure to get a fine, sturdy mate who’ll bear me many daughters. Instead, I receive a small, curvy, pale-haired female who looks at me with anger and fear.

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4 Responses to What an angry rabbit teaches about ‘show-don’t-tell’…#writetip

  1. Tiffany says:

    Love the bunny pic and the caption, so true lol

  2. Lea Kirk says:

    LOL! Yup, that’s one pissed off rabbit. Probably didn’t even say thank you for the carrot.

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