The crafting of a romance novel blurb, from draft to final…#romancewriting #fictionwriting #writecraft

 

I write blurbs the same way I write a novel–by pantsing, not plotting. I let the ideas come to me. If I attempted to sit down and craft a blurb, I would stare at a blank screen going uhh….

Right before or soon after I finish the first draft of the novel, I get away from computer (this either means a walk or a drive or a shower, lol) and I start reflecting on the characters, the story, and the conflict, the story. I let the characters talk to me and retell the story in their own words. And that’s how the blurb gets written.

With Alien Mate series, the blurbs are in first person because the story is written that way. The books alternate between his and her points of view, so the blurb does, too. I thought I’d share the iterations of the blurb I wrote for the soon-to-be released third book, Alien Intention.

Direct from my head to the computer (no rewriting)…

1st draft

I’m Stormy Weathers. I’ve wanted to become an alien’s mail order bride ever since I heard about the Earth program that sends women to planet Dakon. I’m a single mom, and this may be my only chance to find a man who’ll love me and my young son. It hasn’t worked out for me on Earth. I’m attracted to bad boys, the rebels, commitment-phobes. In a crowd of choirboys, I’ll manage to find the jerk. However, this time, it will be different! The moment I saw Romando, the chemistry between us was electric. I don’t care what my sister or her mate or their tribe says, he’s the man for me. A mutual attraction this strong can’t be wrong, and I’ll do anything to get him…

I’m Romando. I’m an outcast in my own tribe. One rash, angry act turned me into a pariah and almost got me banished. But, what everyone resents the most is that I’m one of the lucky few who’ll be getting a mate. The instant Stormy Weathers blew into Dakon with the other Earth females, my horns tingled, and I wanted to claim her immediately. I felt sure she was meant for me until I discovered she was related to my nemesis responsible for my outcast state. I have no choice but to reject her as a suitable mate. If only I could get her out of my mind…

I thought it was pretty good, but I didn’t have a catchy tagline for it. I posted the draft in a couple of Facebook groups, asking for feedback. My friend, author Lea Kirk, did a rewrite of the blurb and sent me this version:

2nd draft 

I’m Stormy Weathers. My dating life on Earth is one natural disaster after another. I’m attracted to bad boys, rebels, commitment-phobes. In a crowd of choirboys, I always manage to find the jerk. All I want is someone to love me and my young son. That’s why I jumped at the chance to be a mail order bride to Dakon, and I’m glad I did. Romando isn’t just an atmospheric disturbance, he’s my perfect storm. I don’t care what my sister or her mate or their tribe says, he’s the man for me. A mutual attraction this strong can’t be wrong, and I’ll do anything to get him…

I’m Romando. I’m an outcast in my own tribe. One rash, angry act turned me into a pariah and almost got me banished. But, what everyone resents the most is that I’m one of the lucky few who’ll be getting a mate. The instant Stormy Weathers blows into Dakon with the other Earth females, my horns tingle. She is meant for me, yet I must resist my instinct to claim her. You see, she is related to my nemesis…the man responsible for my outcast state. Honor and pride dictate that I reject her as a suitable mate. If only I could get her out of my mind…

I liked how Lea had incorporated the weather aspect, because Dakon is stuck in an ice age and climate plays a big role in series. I also liked the hook of a perfect storm, but it didn’t quite fit with the story context as written. So I did a little revising.

3rd and final draft.

Their attraction unleashes a perfect storm…

I’m Stormy Weathers.  My love life on Earth is one natural disaster after the other.  I’m attracted to bad boys, rebels, commitment-phobes. In a crowd of choirboys, I’ll manage to find the jerk. All I want is a man who’ll love me and my young son, so I’m going to Dakon to become an alien’s mail order bride. This time will be different! The chemistry I feel with Romando is electric. It doesn’t matter what my sister or her mate or their tribe says, mutual attraction this strong can’t be wrong, so I’ll do anything to get him…

I’m Romando, an outcast in my own tribe. One rash, angry act turned me into a pariah and almost got me banished. But, what everyone resents the most is that I’m one of the lucky few who’ll be getting a mate. The instant Stormy Weathers blows into Dakon with the other Earth females, my horns tingle. She is meant for me, but I resist the instinct to claim her. You see, she’s related to my nemesis responsible for my outcast state. Honor and pride dictate that I reject her as a suitable mate. If only I could get her out of my mind…

How & when do you write your blurbs? Do you have any blurb-writing tips?

(Alien Attraction cover by Sweet ‘N Spicy Designs. Model photo from Vikkaszone.com).

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2 Responses to The crafting of a romance novel blurb, from draft to final…#romancewriting #fictionwriting #writecraft

  1. Lea Kirk says:

    Thank you for letting me be part of your process, Cara! It was an honor. For some reason, Stormy resonates with me. That doesn’t always happen with my friend’s story blurbs, but this time it did.

    One of my top blurb-writing tips is to call in reinforcements. Every single one of my blurbs exist because I reached out for help, and other (brilliant) authors and readers responded. I am incredibly grateful to *all* of them for being there for me.

  2. Cara Bristol says:

    Thanks, Lea. I really appreciated you taking the time to help me out. It truly does help to get feedback. Even when I’ve gotten “it” as perfect as I can, it is always improved when I solicit feedback.

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