DD & Sci Fi…a hint of and an excerpt from my #WIP

I should be working on book five of the Rod and Cane Society domestic discipline series, but what do you do when a plot bunny grows to a Harvey-sized rabbit and knocks on your door every waking moment?

I caved. I opened the door, and between bouts of promotion for Destiny’s Chance, Coming to Terms, and Disciplinary Measures, I’ve been writing an erotic science fiction domestic discipline novel. Yes, science fiction. This genre, new to me, allowed me to express concepts that no other genre would.

I don’t have a fancy blurb, but here’s a little about the story:

Hero Dak and heroine Omra belong to an alien humanoid militaristic race who live on “androcentric, androsocial” planet where the culture of male domination is enforced by law. Aggression simmers; violence is checked only by strict protocol and mores. Nature, further defined by official decree, has organized the race into a three-tiered caste system. The five Alpha Commanders who rule the planet stand at the top of caste. Beneath them are the alphas, the males deemed dominant, and below them, are the betas, males tested and found to be submissive. Betas work in support functions and are anointed as domestic partners to the alphas. Only alphas may pass on their genetic material by bearing offspring. Females are not even part of the equation;  they are slaves relegated to breeding and ancillary sexual outlets.

Alpha Commander Dak needs a son. In addition, his beta Corren could use a female for sexual release since Dak’s responsibilities as Commander take him away for home for long periods. He purchases a breeder named Omra with the intention of impregnating her and then handing her off to Corren. Only Corren hates her. And Dak falls in love with her. As he does, he begins to question everything he was taught, jeopardizing not only his anointed union with Corren, but all of Parseon.

Breeder explores the concepts of gender roles and social prohibitions against deviant behavior. It includes graphic M/F and M/M sexual content and violence, both rape and nonconsensual domestic discipline.

I estimate that Breeder (my working title) will be between 50,000 and 60,000 words. I have 30,000 words of the first draft done. I’ve been thinking a great deal about where to submit Breeder, whether to go with one of my existing publishers or branch out to a new one. Breeder represents a new genre for me, and the story is different from anything I’ve read.

I almost never share excerpts of WIPS, but here’s a sampling of the opening chapter, unedited and subject to change:


By Cara Bristol

Chapter one

If not for the sneeze, Dak would have exited the containment center with its stale air, musty odor and damp, dark corridors. But the muffled sound caught his attention and when he squinted at the source, he spotted the female crouched in the corner on her straw sleeping mat. He hadn’t noticed her on his way into the Breeder Containment Facility; he’d thought the cell empty.

Dak turned to the BCF director. “What about her?”

The man’s mouth drooped in distaste. “My apologies, Commander. You don’t want that one.”

The director’s opinion had proven worthless; none of the breeders he’d pre-selected for inspection had rated anything close to suitable.

“I would like to see her anyway,” Dak said.

“Very well, sir.” The man saluted and opened the habitation cell with his master entry card. Dak stepped into the small enclosure, the director followed, and the metal gate clanked shut behind them.

The naked female drew into a tighter ball and tucked her face deeper into the crook of her arm. The other breeders had tried to latch onto him through the bars of their habitation cells once they noted his chest insignia signifying his Commander status. He wasn’t just alpha. He was the Alpha.

That this breeder refused to acknowledge his presence was odd. Dak frowned. “Is she mentally deficient?”

The director tightened his lips. “No, just stubborn, ill-behaved.” He nudged the female’s hip with the toe of his boot. “Rise to your feet.” She did not respond, and he moved to prod her harder, but Dak forestalled him with a gesture.

“You will stand.” He grasped the female’s arm and hauled her to her feet. She averted her face, so he grabbed her chin. Tangled hair the color of black heating stones fell back from an oval face to reveal violet eyes the color of the Parseon moon, eyes that sparked with a glimmer of intelligence, arousing his interest more than anything else he’d seen today. Her skin, when it wasn’t smudged by grime and dirt, was probably pale like the sands of the Ospian Sea. He supposed, as breeders went, she wasn’t unattractive, although the odor emanating from her was. His beta would have a fit if he brought such a creature into their home.

“Why is she so filthy?” he asked.

“She refuses to bathe.”

As Dak scrutinized her facial features, checking for symmetry and shape, he noted little in the way of imperfection or dysgenics, other than the fact that she was female. When cleaned up, she would please the eye, but to bear his sons she needed to be healthy and strong. Disease ran rampant in containment centers, and once a female contracted an ailment, they all seemed to get it.

He released her chin, stepped back and swept his gaze over her from head to toe. He exceeded the height of most males, alphas included, while she was smaller than most females so the top of her head didn’t even meet his shoulder. Thin too, almost to the point of malnourishment, although her chest bore an abundance of fatty breast tissue. In the chill of the cell, her nipples had puckered to hard points. She’d be easy to tag, not that he concerned himself with such mundane matters.

He probed both sides of her neck for swollen areas. She swallowed and trembled under his touch, kindling a moment’s sympathy for her fear. Breeders were emotional creatures, and uncertainty frightened them. Not all alphas and their betas treated breeders well, but she would be taken care of in his household if he chose her. His command occupied most of his time and energy, leaving his beta alone for long stretches. Not only would the breeder relieve Corren of many of his household chores, but she would provide a physical outlet as well.

“Does she have a name?” Dak asked.

“Her sire named her Omra.”

Gentle one, it meant.

Dak parted Omra’s lips with his fingers and slipped a digit into her mouth and along her upper gum line to check the solidness of her teeth. He caught a flash in her gaze and jerked his hand back a nanosecond before she snapped her jaws together, so that she only grazed his skin.

The director gasped, his face reddening. “Commander, I am so sorry. I will have her flogged immediately.”

“Unnecessary. I’ll take care of it.” He unclipped a sudon from his belt. Crafted from the tail of the baronian ilyx, the stiff leather sudon still bore the protrusions where the venomous quills had been removed. As he’d not needed to use the sudon before, scants of amounts of ilyx’s stinging venom remained in the raised areas.

The breeder shrieked when he grabbed her, and hauled her slight body two steps to the stone bench.


And that’s all for now folks…what do you think?


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20 Responses to DD & Sci Fi…a hint of and an excerpt from my #WIP

  1. Sue Lyndon says:

    Sounds like a very interesting book, and I don’t think I’ve read anything similar before either, especially the situation with the alpha and beta males being bound to each other. I loved what I read so far, and I’m a sucker for sci fi, so I’m looking forward to your story, Cara! Are you worried your existing publishers won’t go for the non-con or ask you to tone it down, or is it just the fact that this is so different from your previous books?

  2. Cara Bristol says:

    All of that! Noncon is part of it, as well as the violence overall, and the hero is in an M/M relationship but chooses a female over his male partner. M/M is so popular right now. And I’m known for contemporary DD, not sci fi.

    But I love these characters. Usually I focus a little more on the heroine, but in this case, Dak has turned out to be the main character. He’s a “tortured” hero — torn between the dictates of his command and what he knows to be the right thing to do.

  3. Corinne Alexander says:

    I would absolutely read this! I really love sci fi in the spanking genre. This story has already taken such life it’s like a living and breathing thing. I love how different it is! That is part of it’s appeal. Yes, it’s different from what you normally write, but it is ok to branch. I don’t think it will cause an upset in the reader base you already have and it will attract new readers as well. I love what I’ve read so far!

  4. Well done, Cara. I love sci-fi, spanking or not, so I’d enjoy reading this book. As a rule, I don’t get into the M/M stuff, but I could make an exception for something that’s this good. I hope you find just the right publisher for it.

  5. Maren Smith says:

    I will pick up the occasional sci-fi book when it catches my interest…and this has. Go for it, Cara! I’d love to read this when it’s published–non-con and all!

  6. OMG, please drop everything and write this! I am NOT a sci-fi fan but this is so beautiful. I was totally sucked in. Write it. Now. And it will be good to take a break from the stuff you’ve been writing (Rod and Cane although I’d also love that asap:) as it will refresh you – not that you need refreshing but I think you need to write this. For me. I love it. I was sucked in, I’m telling you.

  7. Casey McKay says:

    I am also not a sci fi fan, but apparently if there’s spanking in a book I will read anything. I really like what you shared, I would totally read this book, sci fi, M/M and all! Don’t get too caught up in what you think your audience will expect. If they like your books and like the way you write then you aren’t really going to lose anyone, you’ll probably gain some other readers too.

  8. Thianna D says:

    Holy Crow! I want the story now!

  9. Paloma Beck says:

    This excerpt caught my attention. I’m off and on with sci-fi but this story line sounds interesting. Seems very original, like nothing I’ve read before.

  10. harrylime says:

    Nice beginning. The nuances of the ritualistic society are interesting but the underlying relationships are the real story.

  11. Renee Rose says:

    oh so very hot! I’m excited!!

  12. Karla Doyle says:

    I’m not a sci-fi fan, but your concept and the opening is great. Hurry up and finish it!

    Does Loose Id publish sci-fi? I doubt you’ll have trouble with the non-con or violence, your publisher (whoever that may be) will likely just put a warning on it. Edgy sells very well these days.

    Congrats on being halfway finished! 🙂

  13. Very interesting. I like the concept and the opening it wonderful. The blurb is fantastic. Great job, Cara.

  14. This looks really good. I can’t wait to read it!!! I’m with Natasha Knight on this – write it now, cause I was totally sucked in. I even checked Amazon, just in case you finished it and forgot to tell us.

  15. Lisa Medley says:

    It’s VERY compelling! I love how you jump right into the action and set up the conflict so quickly. I like her already. Sign me up! 🙂 Oh, and write faster 😉

  16. houston_switch says:

    I’m liking it very much…

  17. This book sounds fascinating, Cara. I love Sci-fi especially if there is even a mention of spanking. I’m still somewhat (ok a little more than “some what”) old fashioned so I rarely, if ever, read anything M/M. But I am curious and most definitely would read this book. How soon before we can get more??

  18. Cara Bristol says:

    Thank you, Felissa. I’m glad you’re interested. 🙂 Breeder will be published in mid October 2013 by Loose Id. It will be available in ebook format on Amazon, Barnes & Noble, Loose Id, and ARe, The primary relationship of the Breeder is M/F. Since I wrote this original blog, I’ve posted other excerpts:

    http://bit.ly/14hQJb0 (immediately follows the one you just read)


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